FicWad

I love the plot so much and the whole concept, but please remember to just proof read to avoid any little mistakes :)
This is just constructive criticism, okay? Please don't be offended, but your audience isn't stupid, you don't need to explain every little detail. If you just said something like- 'Gerard's jaw dropped in astonishment'- the audience will understand that Frank's behaviour is unusual or out of character, there's no need for a sentence of explanation, okay? Occasionally, yes, but not all the time.

God, I feel like a bitch. Please don't think I don't like your work, I love it, this is just an area to improve in :D

xo