Review for Another Broken Day

Another Broken Day

(#) Lillith_Thursday 2006-10-11

No. It didn't suck. I just have one complaint though. Well not complaint but a suggestion. When I read this chapter I saw that it went from Benji's POV to a third person POV. I don't want to sound mean but I'd suggest that it stay in the first person sense. If it goes into a flash back, just keep it in a first person sense. Okay. I sounded like abitch there. I'm just trying to help. Hope I wasn't beening mean because I didn't want it to sound that way but it was a good chapter.

Author's response

You didn't sound like a bitch at all. Thanks for pointing it out it's much appreciated.