You know, at first I wasn't sure if I liked your writing style, I'm particular too and had noticed a couple typos and whatnot, but I am just obsessive compulsive when it comes to editing my shit. But, the plot intrigued me.
ANYWAY, I actually do very much like this, and I'm not trying to be facetious I really mean it, and you said you wanted honesty.
I'm going to go back and eventually try to fix the mistakes, and I do appreciate you telling me what you don't like. Awesome sauceXD