FicWad

Well that worked - worked well too. The good points? It had a lot of pace - it never stopped moving. You kept dialogue going and didn't waste my time as a reader. You developed an atmosphere and as a reader, I felt I could see into the mind of the narrator. The bad points? I felt that the relationship with Jessica had more mileage, and it might have been nice for the twist to have been that she was a vampire all the time, and hence undead - perhaps that would have been why her blood vanished :-)