(#) _11 2006-10-16
dang, there's only one review!
this is really good. I was drawn in by the disjointed feeling of the way it is written. and sure, not everyone is perfectly in-character, but changes in circumstances can change how one acts, so it's very justifiable. the non-linear element of the parts within the first chapter you have so far reminds me a bit of Boogiepop Phantom. adds a nice effect.
I hope you keep going with this. it's a great piece of work and it'd be a real shame if it didn't get finished. so, write more please? >_
Author's response
Thank you for the review. I am still working on it, slowly but surely, I promise. Ironically the non-linear elements are giving me issues as the next chapters keep trying to shift to a more linear storyline and it's proving difficult to hold the tone across it. In the end, I may have to wind up waiting until the whole thing is finished before posting the rest (I desperately hope not at the rate I'm going!), but it will go up sometime before I'm 90, baring an act of God.