1) I like the extra characters, they make a nice break from the Frerard drama. I mean, Ik now it's a MCR fic and all, but some stories are all "FRANK! GEE! FRANK AND GEE! FRANK OR GEE! FRANK WITHOUT GEE! OTHER MEMBER! FRANK! GEE!" So yeah :L (just rambling here don't mind me...)
2) :/ don't really understand this Q, but my favorite character in this story is probably Bob, he's just so mysterious 'cause you son't really talk about him xD
3) Epic. Just... epic.
4) Yes, you're a lot better than most of the writers on here that miss out words, spell them wrongly, use weird phrases they facey making up etc ;3
5) Nothing that bugs me really, it's perfect