Hehe first lemme say that I feel so special cause I'm the first to review on your first story! I feel so honored! Anyway I'll cut to the chase-
-it's a tad cliched but as it's your first story and still above par, I should expect amazing things from you in the future my friend.
-I love how the characters personalities are maintained throughout
-I think you have potential
-The chapters are ok lengths
Ok I'm gonna stop with the "-" cause it's getting on my nerves. KEEP WRITING AND ENJOY LIFE MY INTERWEB FRIEND
Love From Amanda but not in a creepy way.
Author's response
Thank's for the advice, I'll keep it in mind for the next story! Thank you!