I really like this. Its hard to believe that you don't write much poetry, it seems like you've been writing it for a long time. It flows very naturally. I really like your killjoy name. Mine is Cellophane After, which I don't really like but will have to deal with because if I came up with my own it would be something stupid like Blueberry Orange or some nasty gum flavor. I am a very un-creative individual.
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Thank you sooo much; I'm pleased that you think this went okay.
Your Killjoy name is awesome; way better than mine!
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such an encouraging review! :)