This chapter was amazing! I'm not just saying it to be nice or whatever, it really is great. Now, about the length. Short, long, or medium, all the chapters left me wanting to know what happened next. Length isn't as important as quality, and I can assure you that when someone has your caliber of skill when writing, length does not mean a thing. All of your readers will take anything they can get. People need to live their lives and do other things, so it isn't that big of a deal. You shouldn't worry. Anyway, it was really nice to see that Gerard approves of Frank and Mikey. It is still indefinite as to whether Mikey and Frank are boyfriends or not, but Gerard is assuming they will be because Frank has really shown that he cares about Mikey. His opinion of Frank has really changed, but he still has a lot to be cautious of and can't fully trust him yet. He says "It’s amazing how much one person can change in the space of just twenty four hours." He could be saying that in disgust when they next go to school and he sees Frank not doing anything to help Mikey. Or he could be saying that in happiness when he sees Frank outright helping Mikey. Since Gerard knows what Frank's personality is like, he knows that there is possibly a chance that he will go back to what he acted like before. He also knows that Mikey is what Frank needs, and he heavily doubts that Frank will hurt Mikey again.
It was so cute to see Frank all blushy and smiley about kissing Mikey. They were so much like a couple in this chapter. It was so sweet that Gerard used his super awesome ghost talents to bring Frank and Mikey closer together, even if Mikey was asleep.
This was an amazing chapter! It was very cute and sweet, and it was very well written. It really showed how much Frank cares about Mikey and it has protective, caring, wonderful big brother Gerard, which I really, really like. This was a magnificent chapter and I really loved it. Also, this isn't really a tip or anything, but you could try listening to music to help you. Sometimes you can get really good inspiration and ideas from music.
I know some great ideas while listening to music and even from watching television. Think about how your story relates to the song or show, and if it doesn't, think about what from those things could work well in your story. And I completely agree with taking your time. I doubt my advice will be helpful, but I'm still going to say that I hope this helps. Great job!!!
Author's response
Thank you very much; I'm soooooo pleased that you think this chapter went alright.
What you said about length is very encouraging and I'm really grateful that you've taken the time to say something as lovely as what you've said in your review!
I was thinking about making Gerard hate the idea of Frank being with Mikey, but after the last story I wrote I really wanted to do it differently so I made him happy instead. He is still a little untrusting of Frank partly because he's seen Frank mistreat Mikey and partly because he's just an overprotective big brother even though he does doubt that Frank will hurt Mikey again.
I'm glad that you think they were like a couple in this chapter, I really wanted to put that idea across to show how much Frank really does care.
Thank you sooooooooo much! I wanted this chapter to convey how much they (Frank and Gerard) care about and want to protect Mikey, so I hope that came across.
Thank you very much for the tips; I will be sure to use them!
Thank you so very, very much for taking the time to leave such a kind, helpful and detailed review! :)