This is incredible, it captures so many relatable emotions and thoughts; you really are extremely clever with the way you word things.
My favorite part was probably,
"No one notices,
The black rainbow lies."
I love the whole "black rainbow" paradox, it really speaks to me and I can imagine that it, along with the rest of this, speaks to a lot of other people as well. It takes a hell of a lot of talent to write something so identifiable and meaningful; these are of an almost professional standard!
The one thing that I would say could use a little work is the rhythm, but other than that this is prefect!
You have absolutely no reason to be nervous about posting this; if I could write half as well as you clearly can I'd be proud of every syllable. Fantastic job!
:)
Author's response
Wow, thank you so much! Yeah, I agree about the rhythm...Will have to edit that. Thanks so much for taking the time to review and being so lovely...made my day :D
CosmicZombie xo