I think that this is really, really clever and extremely atmosphereic, especially the ending. It may be short, but I think that just adds to the powerful impact and overall effect of the story. Fantastic job and I sincerely hope that you write more like this.
Well done! :D
Author's response
Thank you so much!!! You're so nice. I was trying to extend it a bit but I'm glad you think the length was fine. I've been thinking of more one shots and hopefully have one up soon. Thank you for reviewing!