You are extremely talented with poetry, I especially love the ambiguity of this and the way it felt kind of like a metaphor, yet so clear-cut at the same time. I especially loved the structure of the first section, it just flowed really well and was smooth to read. This completely makes sense to me and I thought it was a wonderful piece of poetry. Great job! :D
P.S. People who rate your work down are just immature jerks who need to find a better way to spend their rating points. Don't pay attention to it and find peace of mind in the fact that, quite clearly, too many people like your work for it to be bad. :)