Hey there! I've just been reading some of your stories on here, and whilst the ideas of them are really good, I was thinking that the actual text could maybe be improved a little? I'm not trying to be mean, but I sort of have no idea what's going on. If you could space the paragraphs out a little, and start a new line when someone is talking, then that would make it a lot easier to read! :)
Like I said, I don't want to come across as mean, just trying to give constructive criticism!
xoAbby