Wow, I'm very impressed. This is a very, very origional look at things in this show and I for one like your writing. I know what it feels like to be 'downed' by textbook teachers though, but stick to your style because it's a very precious thing and theyre jealous that they can't get it!
I like your descriptions of the heroes, and the way you brought Chronus/nos and Kronos together to make Cronus and the way his mind had become warped and such. I really, really, really, love different perspectives, especially ones that turn everything you think you know upside-down, and you seem very close to achieving that. Nice work on the narration.
As for constructive critasism: maybe it's just the way you write, or maybe it's just the way I write, but I might have wanted to see some more detail, though, with the way you wrote this first chapter it might be difficult. Anyways, that's about as much as I can say.
Like to hear from you again soon,
~Demenior
Author's response
Impressed? You flatter me. +grin+ Of course, originality is something I pride myself on, being... wel... me. xD I didn't think this chapter would be much to compliment on, as it was more of a filler intro to keep me on track of things.
Yeah, detail is something I tend to put a lot of; I decided that since there wasn't much to this chapter I would waste much on detailing it all too much. I'll keep that in mind though, and see if I can better balance things out for you all in the next chapter.