Ok, you're already off to a good start. And I can honestly say....I'm hooked!!!! It would help if you were to make your chapters a little longer though. But overall, I really like the way you portray the characters. I can't wait to read about the neglectful mother!!!
Author's response
Thanks! I can't write longer chapters because I snuck and joined this site so I have to write the stories from my cell phone and the space is limited.... :/