I hate obvious questions in the summary and I hate tense skipping. Grrr. I could seriously throw a dictionary in some people's faces. My friend made me read a book she wrote today, no word of a lie, this is how it started;
'as i walked too the shops today, i saw a man with a nife. ahhh i screamed. he could have hurt me so i ran. i run as fast as i can and i ducked into a small aly way to hide. hello there girl he says as i hide he came up to me and tryed to stab me. that is how i, 'random name' dyed.'
I copied that from the piece of paper she wrote it on which is now in front of me. I'm so tempted to red pen it all and give it back. She's in year NINE. Come on.
Author's response
That hurts to read... Show her this!