This seems like it could be good. It has potential definitely and I could see reading more if you posted, and if you used spell check.
I really hope this doesn't come off offensively but the spelling is awful. Just in the title, it's 'heartbreak- not heartbrake.'
The summary: 'Starbucks?' 'witness' 'Britain?'
Sorry but there are way too many ways to check your spelling online for this to be an issue.
Good luck with continued writing though and I hope to see more for this story. :)
Author's response
Thanks.
I've fixed the words you pointed out.
but if you where walking about the spellings in Joshua's speech. Its suppose to be bad. Just saying :)
Talking*