OH MY GOD OH MY GOD
WHAT DID SHE DO
WHAT DID SHE DO
FLIPPING OUT NOW
SHE BETTER NOT HAVE DONE ANYTHING STUPID
OH MY GOD FLIPPING OUT NOW
Okay the writing in this was excellent. I particularly liked this part:
"As I walked down the large hallway nearing my room with each step I re-evaluated myself; I really needed to stop begin jealous of every man that came within touching distance of her. I placed the card key in waiting for the small light to turn green before turning the handle and opening the door.
It was quiet, almost deafening in silence as I stood in the mini hall of our room. I open the door to the bathroom to check if Fiona was there but she wasn’t. The hairs on my arms and the back of my neck stood straight as a cold breeze eerily brushed past.
Something in my gut told me something was wrong, my stomach flipped and squeezed as I mentally braced myself for what I would see next. Inching closer and closer to the corner my heart thumbed erratically in my ribcage a thin sheen of sweat covering my palms."
It was really great. And I seriously cannot WAIT for the next chapter.
You said you were angry/upset - I know loadsa people say this all the time and don't really mean it and you probably don't want to, but you can talk to me - you have my email address and I have a Blackberry so I'm more likely to answer quickly.
Hope you're okay, great chapter! :D
Author's response
You're going to have to wait and see, I'll try to do an update that may or may not be massive before I go on holiday so you're not freaking out over this for 2 weeks.
I think my writing has improved because I've been reading actual books other than fanfiction and the combination of Watching QI. I'm sorry but waiting for it is the suspense that makes it even better when it finally arrives!
I'm fine now, I was really just angry at the Olympics, they have destroyed the world because David Tennant didn't do the last leg of the flame which was a fixed point in time so they've caused a crack in time....No wonder they say 2012 is when the world is supposed to end...Plus Muse did the OFFICIAL song for the Olympics and wasn't played once. I feel like I was slapped in the face by them but I didn't explain because it's kind of stupid saying you were angry because a fictional character didn't play a part in the Olympics :L
Aww Thank you so much :D