It's really really good!
Just one thing, it's nothing really, just check out the spelling and stuff at the end of the chapter. I know that feeling. That feeling where all you care about is just getting the chapter out and you don't even know that you've misspelled the main character's name three times in a row.
You haven't, of course. That was me. It was a bad day.
Yeah, just give it a look. The story itself is damn fine but the syntax is dragging it down.
Author's response
I really appreciate that, I noticed last night over reading the chapter that I had a few mistakes, I said ill fix it in the morning and I did indeed.
Thanks for reading another update tonight possibly :)