Review for Our Lips Touch

Our Lips Touch

(#) imakilljoywannabe 2012-08-16

Hey hey hey guess who? I'm excited I haven't read the next chapter yet and I'm dying to ~squeals~ ALL OF THE CHAPTER IS AMAZINGNESS (even if it is a filler... :D) I loved the bus driver, he's so indifferent to the actual issue of Franke DYING because he was hit by a bus.... tsk tsk. Anywho sorry for the late comment I was at a cabin in the woods for a week with no internet 0.0 (Hard.....) but now I'm back so hooray! Have a Ray Toro with his fluffy fro of mystery! You have to tell me what you find in his big puffball of hair! For the next chapter you get a big party with all of them playing music and dancing to their pre-recorded music! Sound fun? I know I'd love it! :D Another review coming soon!

Author's response

Yay i've been waiting for your comment. i had a scarey thought that maybe you lost intrest in my story and i was like 'NOOOOOOOO!'.

I jumped up and down in real life at school when I had seen you left a commet (every one just looked at me like i'd gone crazy) but any way.... here is what happen with Ray and his Fro P.S. maybe i should put this up as a story:) enjoy. this is the longest response ever, hope you like it:)

“Oh, hey Ray” Frank Iero said slightly irritated as he walked passed with a skittle cloud following him just above his head pouring down colourful skittles. “Hey Frank.” Ray responds. Gerard then walk into the ‘Gummy bear’ pool area wearing black swimming board shorts and looking around for something, he lifts a pillow from the poolside lounge chair then drops it back after finding nothing. He stands up straight with one hand on his hip and scratches the back of his head.

“What you Lookin’ for Gee?” I ask as I walk towards Ray where he is seated at a poolside table. Gerard just continues to walk around in a circle “I’m looking for my sunglasses but I can’t find them anywhere,” he stops and turns to face Ray and me “You guys haven’t seen them have you?”

“No, sorry Gee.” I say and Ray just shakes his head side to side. He shakes his head hard enough that a book flies out of his fro and lands at my feet, I look down at the book with a ‘WTF’ expression. “What the hell?” I turn to face Ray “did that book just come from your fro?” I ask with amusement as I point to the hard cover book now lying on the ground.

“Yep!” chirped Frank as he tried to dodge the skittle cloud. “It happens.” Stated Gerard as he dived into the ‘gummy bear’ pool. Ray just smiles. Gerard then surfaces and paddles over to an inflatable pool lounge in the middle of the pool “How many hair brushes have you lost in that fro of yours Ray?” he yells over his shoulder.

“Too many to count.” Ray answers and takes a sip of ice tea. “What else have you lost in that puff of hair?” I ask intrigued to find out. He looks up and thinks “Umm…” he starts, there is a long pause until he speaks again “A lot of stuff.” I roll my eyes “like what?”

“Well, I once lost my wallet and keys in there.” I grin wondering how the fuck you lose both your wallet and keys in your own hair. “There was also that time I found my lost CDs while I was brushing ‘the fro’” he announces as he patted the puff ball of hair, then something else falls out. I walk over and pick up the object from the ground. It was the left shoe of a pair of bright red converse. I hold the shoe up in my hand and ask “Is this your shoe?” I was expecting him to say ‘yes’ so when he gave me a puzzled look and said “No” I was surprised.

Frank then waltzed over and inspects the shoe, bringing with him his own personal skittle cloud “Hey that’s my shoe!” he exclaims. I give Frank his shoe and catch some of the raining skittles. As I’m popping them into my mouth Frank faces Ray “Where’s the other one?” he asked a little lost. Ray just shrugs his shoulder. “Maybe it’s still in ‘the Fro’,” I suggest as I swallow the mouthful of skittles “can I have a look?” I ask Ray.

“Sure, go ahead” I move behind the chair he is currently sitting in. First thing I notice is how soft his hair is. “Wow! It’s really soft.” Ray shifts in his seat with pried “I only use the best stuff for my Fro.”

Frank just rolls his eyes “Whatever ‘fro boy’ just tell your hair to spit out my right shoe” Ray just ignores Frank and takes another sip of his ice tea. “Hey I found something” I announce. Excitement washes over Frank as he bounces up and down on the spot “Is it my other shoe?” he asks eagerly, I feel bad that I have to tell him it’s not his shoe “Ahh, no. Sorry Frank.” He pouts his lips as disappointment dominates his adorable face replacing the excitement.

“What is it?” Ray speaks up. I smile as I pull out the object “It’s one of those missing hairbrushes.” I place the discovered hairbrush on to the table. “I wish it was my shoe.” Frank mumbles sadly to himself as he tries to shield his head from the down pour of skittles with his jacket. “Don’t worry Frankie, I’ll find your shoe.” I promised as I continue my search. Frank smiles one of his cute smiles “yay” he exclaims.

Sometime later…

“Okay, so we have found…one bottle of shampoo, two cans of coke, A ‘Mad’ magazine, one light bulb, three bags of lollies, three odd socks, one wrist watch, an orange ‘ping pong’ ball, one set of head phones, my missing iPod…how the fuck did that end up in your fro?” Ray shrugs his shoulder and Frank giggles. I breathe in a deep breath before I continue with the list of items I had currently found in Rays ‘never ending’ Fro “four CDs, twelve hairbrushes, six books…” I stop again and give Ray a ‘seriously, what the fuck’ look, how could someone not notice these items in their hair? I think to myself then I continue “a bottle of shaving cream, Gee’s bat shaped belt buckle, eight of Frankie’s guitar picks, eleven of your own guitar picks and a teddy bear.”

“Fuck that’s a shit load of stuff!” I exclaim “yeah” Ray says shyly. I look over toward Frank who is clutching onto his one lonely shoe, standing in the skittle rain. “Where’s my other shoe?” he asks almost heartbroken. “Don’t worry, I’ll keep looking.” I tell him. Gerard’s voice then catches our attention “Where the hell did all that stuff come from?” he asks puzzled. I sigh, he obviously fallen asleep on the inflatable lounge and missed the whole expedition of pulling random items from Rays Fro.

“Ray’s Fro.” Frankie answered while pouring out the skittles that had filled his lonely shoe. He sighs than tries to hit the skittle cloud with his shoe “Fuck off.” he grumbles towards the cloud floating above him. “Oh!” is Gee’s only response as he lays back down on the inflatable lounge and flops an arm over his eyes, I think he muttered something about the sun been too bright but he was too quiet to hear. So I went back to pulling random items out of Ray’s Fro.

“Hey look, it’s an umbrella.” I announce as I pull it out. Frank immediately jumps over to me “Can I use that?” he asks with big hazel puppy-dog eyes “Sure, here.” I say as I place the umbrella in his open hand. “Yay, thank you.” He grins as he moves back a couple of steps.

He places his lonely red shoe onto the table gently and looks at it for a moment to make sure it wasn’t going to run away. Then instead of opening the umbrella he holds it like a baseball bat and threatens the skittle cloud above him “Alright you mother-fucking skittle shitter you,” he griped tightly to the umbrella then continued “back the Fuck off and leave me alone or I’ll make you taste the mother-fucking rainbow…” he growled and gave the cloud the evil eye “GOT IT!” he snapped and with that the skittle cloud dropped a bucket load of skittles then zipped away.

Frank relaxed and beamed a big cheesy self-satisfied grin. He dropped the umbrella next to the other discoveries from Ray’s hair and picked up his lonely red shoe. Ray and I just stare at him “What? You try putting up with been rained on by skittles for a couple of days non-stop and see how you react.” he defensively crosses his tattooed arms over his chest “It’s fucking annoying.” He huffs. I just giggle at him then when back to search for his lost shoe.

“OH” my eyes light up and Frank jumps up and down “Is it my shoe? Is it my shoe? Is it? Is it?” he reminded me of an over excited puppy about to be taken on a walk. It’s not actually his shoe but Gee’s missing sunglasses “No, sorry Frankie it’s not your sho-” I cut myself off as I find another item and I turn to face Frank with a huge grin on my face. Frank looks like he could sky rocket at any moment now as his hazel eyes widened to the size of baseballs at my grin.

I hold up my hands, one holding Gee’s sunglasses and the other holding Franks red converse. Frank practically squealed at the sight, he started behaving like some kind of fan-girl. He rushed over to me and embraced me in one giant, tight bear hug “You found it, you found it”. As much as I love frank I still want to breathe “Frr…aa…nkie cc..an’t brrr…eeathe” I struggle to gasp. He finally lets me go and starts dancing around the gummy bear pool with both of this bright red converse in each hand.

“Hey Gee!” I yell to the sleeping singer in the middle of the gummy bear pool. “Hu, what? Yeah?” he mumbles as he sits up. “Found your sunglasses!” he smiles widely at me with all his small teeth on show. Gerard then notices Frank dancing around like an idiot with a pair of bright red converse. He just chuckles at his weird short friend and motions for me to throw him his sunglasses. He catches them with little effort “Thanks sugar!” he yells to me as he slides them over his eyes the rests his hands behind his head with a big smile fixed on to his face.

“Whoop, Whoop!” I turn to see Frank end his joyful dance and hug his shoes tight to his chest, I swear he whispers to them ‘love you’. I giggle at his excitement over getting his shoes back. He then bounces back over to Ray and I. he stops in front of me and kisses me on the cheek “Thank you, so much.” He beams. I can’t help but giggle “Any time Frankie boy”. Frank then turns to Ray “Hey where the fuck did you get that cupcake?” he asks. Rays mouth is full of cupcake so he just smiles and points to his Fro. Frank and I both giggle at him.

“Hey guys,” we all turn to pay attention the Gee who is sitting up on the inflatable lounge “Yeah?” Frankie asks “Is it just me or are we missing something?” I look at Gee puzzled while Ray and Frank look at each other then back at Gerard. We all end up shrugging our shoulder “like what?” I ask. Gerard shrugs his shoulders and scratches the back of his head “I don’t know, it just feels like something is missing.” We all spend a moment tying to figure out what could be missing. We end up giving up “Oh well.” Gee smiled as he laid back down.

“Wanna play ‘guitar hero’?” I asked Ray and Frank pointing to the TV and Game console that was set up just over to the side. They both grinned evilly at me “Hell yeah!” Frank jumped with excitement, “Your all going down” Ray trashed talked. “AH,” I state loudly “you keep trying to play the real notes on the guitar!” I grin and placed one hand on my hip and point at Ray with the other “You may be better than me when it comes to playing a real guitar, but I’m afraid you’re the one going down when it comes to ‘guitar hero’” I hear Frank snicker behind me “That goes for you to Iero, your both going down.”

After playing ‘guitar hero’ for about 20mins Gee suddenly springs up “Oh fuck!” we paused the game and turn to face Gee “What’s the matter?” Ray asks. Gee looked guilty “what?” Frank tries to get an answer. Gee stares at the three of us for a moment that opens his mouth “you know how I said before ‘it feels like something is missing’?” we all nod our head. Gee takes off his sunglasses and looks at us blankly “Where’s Mikey?” he asked simply.

ta-da :) (where's Mikey? i never ended up getting him and his unicorns)

Fuck this is long, i posted it and stright away i was like 'oops!' :).XOXO.