Review for Rescuing Dan

Rescuing Dan

(#) RockMusic 2012-08-20

Dramatic. Wow. Way to let it slip Dan.
Awww Phil wants to rescue him :3 adorable
Could you guys consider spacing it out into paragraphs and maybe noting that it's about to switch (on way or another, maybe even just a dash or something small like that) because that's a tad confusing. First we're with Dan then it randomly switches to Phil. Love this story though.