This was lovely! Just one part that kind of threw me off was when Gerard said 'we usually don't let girls into our end of the year sleep over but I'll make an exception due to the lack of Frank this year.' The phrase seems too advanced for an 8 year old to say, but in all it was a great chapter:)
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Gahhh I know, I kept forgetting that they are little kids, i tried to keep it as simple as possible but... It didnt quite work.