Okay, I like it, it's good. But for me it's missing pizzaz, it's good I enjoyed it... ish.... If you want a little advice, suppress and keep the first chapter a little mysterious... It captures the reader and thats how you keep them reading.
I'm giving this a 7/10, keep writing and take my advice ;)
Author's response
Okay, thanks for the advice :) Just keep reading Kieya -.-