In all honesty I have never played the video game. Bu t I am a fan of cartoons and I have watched The Soic adventure cartoon. So while I read this I emagined the cartoon charaters in the role you created. It seemed convincing enough. It is also a original idea. How would have ever thought of writting a fanfic of a video game character. But then againg movies have been made about them too. So for what this is I say it is good. However you realy need to be a fan to injoy this to its fullest.
Note to author.(You are realy writting to a nich audience with this one in my opinion.)