FicWad

Well, I just found your story, and although it does have the potential of certainly being an interesting story, it is entirely too rushed. There isn't enough structure and details included in the story to give it any depth, or body. For an example, someone going to get groceries. A man got into his car, went to the grocery store, bought his groceries, and went home. What about what kind of day it was when he got into his car? What kind of car was it? What did he see on the way to the grocery store? Was the store busy? What did he purchase? Who did he encounter as he was shopping? Put some details into the story, so you can, if you will, put some meat on those bones, and fill out the body of the story. Like I said, there is potential for an interesting story, but not if you continue the way you are now. Great try, keep it up.