This story really has potential ^_^ As a little bit of constructive criticism I'd say that aiming for a little over 1000 words per chapter will keep people satisfied :3 By the way would you happen to like Fearless Vampire Killers? It's just your username reminded me of them :D You might be like "well duh" But I made that mistake before and it turned out they just liked Dr Who xD
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Thank you! It is inspired by Fearless Vampire Killers ^___^ also by Panic! At The Disco but mostly FVK :D