lol i once(two weeks ago) did this intense moshing where i rammed into the closet door, tripping me to make me fall on a pile of dirty clothes and locked me in. Of course when i went to bed i didn't know it but i got a few bruised ribs and some intense back pains. oh well, no gym for a week!!! :D
but that closet is seriously in for a war -.-
i might be the wrong person to critically review, if i don't like something i don't diss it, i just let it be(Beatles song!!)
i'll try though cause i'm taking your word for it that it'll get exciting and shocking twisty so we all have to be patient through fillers. I think all i can advise are interesting fillers and cleverly imputing those important info.
No pressure whatso ever, good luck!! x)
Author's response
thank you, and i've been thinking about my story (while doing dishes, working, cleaning.) and it's starting to really come together in my head. It should be good if i can get the idea from my head to the laptop XD.
thank you for commenting.