(#) DnG 2012-12-02
I just had a chance to reread the first chapter and must say that it is much easier to follow and understand. The descriptions give me an idea now of what certain people look like, like Sailor Saturn ... I remember watching Sailor Moon when I was younger and still had eyesight. She was a cutie.
As for Harry's half brother and sister, cool, very cool.
I look forward to reading chapter two now.
Author's response
I'm glad you liked it and once again I'm sorry.