nice..but... not ur best... too short... and u should have ade it longer like 1 or 2 more chapters explaining what happened when they met.. other than that i give u a C on this one... the other one was an A this one is a C... i hope ur next one will be better!
Author's response
Ya I think I can do better too. Again, if I added a chapter or two, then it wouldn't be a one-shot. The one that you gave me an A on, that one was the sequel, right? I think so. Alot of people liked that one.