I dunno, this story has a much better plot than mine lol. I'm thinking of deleting the ones I did and rewriting them with the same plot I had before. It's weird looking back at old writing and thinking, "blech, did I actually write that??" Anyway, But I'm sure people will like yours, after all I guess I'm not the only one curious to see what happens next. Maybe you should put more "romantic scenes" in your sequel. It seems people usually like that stuff a lot. I try to do those, but I always get uncomfortable writing them, ya know? Twists and turns do make stories more interesting though, as long as you keep the main plot flowing.
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Hmm, maybe I will post it.