Review for Personalized oneshots anyone?

Personalized oneshots anyone?

(#) CarcinoGeneticist 2013-10-01

Bluh I'm finally getting this done.

Character One: Leon Elvis Prescott-Algoode
Age: 17
Rank: youngest child
Basic Looks: Green hair, blue eyes, pale skin, dark eyebrows.
Nickname: Sporty-o, Kiddo, Miss Jackson
Personality: Leon has addiction issues. Prefers to live as fast as possible and see how far he can push his body before it stops working. Has issues with Alyssa from years of constant bullying. Can be crudely oversexual and finds innuendo in everything.
When on best behaviour, Leon often comes off as charming and sincere, enjoying music and dancing, despite the fact he cannot dance very well and has trouble remembering lyrics.

Character Two: Katharine Wilde

Age: 17
Basic Looks: Long blonde hair, brown eyes, toned body.
Nickname: Kitty
Personality: Aloof, Cheerful, constantly eating, and an eternal optimist.

Character Three: Jan Preston Prescott-Algoode
Age: 23
Rank: Oldest Child

Basic Looks: Pale skin and pale blonde hair, grey eyes, and always paint-stained fingertips.
Personality: He always tries to do right by both his siblings, and is working to become a youth pastor. However, he enjoys spray-painting and tagging buildings.

Character Four: Alyssa Paige Prescott-Algoode
Rank: Middle child

Age: 21

Basic looks: short, magenta-colored hair, tan skin, and lots of baggy ill-fitting clothing.
Nicknames: Lyssie, Lys, Empress Lys.

Personality: Alyssa is aggressive. Agressively violent, aggressively dominant, competitive, holds a grudge, and occasionally vulgar/sexual.
Always looking to pick a fight, or embarrass/emotionally scar Leon.

PLOT: Leon's finally getting close to a number or a date with Katharine, who's one of the more popular girls and a girl that he is more or less madly in love with.
Just when he's about to get somewhere, his older brother Jan and sister Alyssa show up to pick him up from school and promptly embarrass the hell out of him on purpose.

Author's response

Okay, I'm just working on another oneshot and then I'll do this one :)

Also, I dunno if you've read The Heroin Diaries by Nikki Sixx? Anyway the character Leon reminded me of that, it sounds exactly like the way Nikki described himself back in the eighties. I just thought that was really cool

Vikki xoxo