:Second time read through:
Like what you did, especially with the take charge attitude and messing with the minds of Dimbles and Snape. Also like how those two went out with Moldy, and was just ambiguous enough so that no one really knew what was going on.
Would've liked to have seen a bit more interaction between Harry and Hermione, but that's just me. Love that you had Harry be the father for Luna's children... more could've been touched on there as well, but it was still good to see.
Overall, I really like this story. Excellent work!