Leave it to you to make another great lemon story. In my eyes, for a story to be considered great, it not only requires a great author orchestrating it, but it also needs a great plot itself. This story has that.
One thing I find questionable, though, is Hinata's relatively early joining of Naruto's 'Pride'. Considering the fact that you intend for more women hailing from Konoha to align themselves with him, it would have made more sense if you held off on this and allowed her to come to terms with the fact that the man she idolized became a missing nin before having her join his harem. After all, she had sacrificed a lot for her clan, and having finally become clan head, I doubt she would have abandoned it so quickly, even if it was Naruto. Also, it would have been interesting to see things in the village from her point of view (from her vantage point as head of the Hyūga Clan) after Sasuke became Hokage.
I can say, however, that I loved Shizune becoming not only his first woman, but also the mother of his first child. I can only imagine how things will go from here.