This story is great so far as much as I read but the thing that bothers me is the in between comments you put and the long description at the top, you write more of your personal life then the story in most chapters, it distracts and when reading the story and having to pause to scroll over your comments is a bother now. I know this is a great story and you are a very colorful person and but perhaps next time you should write the description of your personal life on the bottom and add less and less in between comments in the story. You are a talented writer but in order to get more people to read this is to not distract them with comments and personal description in the top or in between because people are going to get bored and not want to read a fan fiction if it is only a person talking about themselves more then the story