The way his hair looked today was absolutely stunning. If I had to be a guy by some reason, I wanted my hair to look like his...oh. Sorry. -> It´s alright. How could a narrator pass by without taking notice of Pete´s emolicious hair. We´re all just human... ;)
I love the flashbacky part of what happenend on the bus/ way back to Will´s office. Also like how you returned to the present moment. Good literary work! :)