Review for Not Looking

Not Looking

(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-27

mr. nickname freaks me out. i'm not gonna lie.

anyway...

choice quotable (based strictly on word usage this time):

He reached up and pulled out the hair band keeping her hair in the bun and her curls escaped like un-just prisoners over her shoulders and back. the description of that one action is so powerful that it almost makes me feel like i was on the bus watching them. that didn't come out right, but hopefully you understand what i was getting at with that.

the way you played out the whole chapter was perfect. my mind was trying to formulate how you would do it after our chat, but this...well, it made my imagination seem like a non-animated version of the blow job face.(which we all know doesn't compare to the animated version of the blow job face)

"You're one too...." He said staring at her. ending the chapter like this makes me want to steal your soul. seriously.

thank you for the long update, katy. i love you.

Author's response

Thank you for your help Sista, as you can see, I basically summed it up in the summary. If it wasn't for you, we would've been waiting a lot longer for this.

I hope I did it justice.