I for some reason cannot rate this however I would rate this highly as I found both stories entertaining and amusing and also exciting ... I would absolutely love to see more (because I want to know if Pete will fess up and I want to know if this thing will ever work out or will it turn into a three-way) ... The one thing I can mainly suggest to you is Grammar ... Your grammar is very off in both stories, not just with the placing of correct punctuation (capitals, quotation marks, the starting a new line every time someone speaks, etc.) but also the spelling is very off in patches ... I would gladly edit both stories completely for you if you want that improved (as I love editing stories and stuff) and I don't mean this as offensive or anything ... But other the grammar it is a very thrilling and captivating story ... Excellent work, well done and I can't wait for more (if you so choose to)
Much Love ~ Kat
Author's response
I know, I wrote these stories forever ago when I was much younger and had just started writing. I can't even reread these stories because the grammar is so cringeworthy and awful. This is my first time back on here in at least a year and I was thinking of correcting them and rewriting them a bit just for the fun of it.