That was amazing.
It actually makes my one-shots look like dirt. Like, seriously.
You can really picture his emotions, and it really gets you in depth with the story without explaining a lot. Well done. Uses rating point =]
Author's response
Thank you for such a great comment. I really didn't think that this was very good, it was just because I was feeling like crap one day after school. You have made my day happier. :)