Aww...
Really slow start on this one. You do not do such a hot job of setting your scene. The readers already know that Jaken simpers for Sesshou and that Yash chopped off Sesshou's arm. You could cut the first five or six paragraphs with no detriment to the story.
If I were you I'd focus more on the way the characters were feeling. Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru fight a lot. What precipitated this particular fight? What makes today different?
Author\'s Response: My first review on this site! Thank you. You give some good advice which makes sense and I appreciate and value that.