First of all, cowpatty is a hell of a username for the both of you. I’m so digging your scene. (Ha ha… sounds like something Pete might say.)
I found that Emily had been trying to get my attention and that I was staring right at Pete's crotch without realizing it. -> Please, Evie. Everyone realized it but you… ;)
Nice intro chappie. I like how the last thing Evie says is the overall topic of the story.