Geeeez, you’re shooting out new chapters like no tomorrow. ;) Ah, I don’t mind but it might take a while for me to catch up.
/ A gorgeous creepy dude who was going to kidnap me and force himself into my pants.
I smiled back and let out a little giggle. "Of course you can," I responded, moving closer to him. I stood in front of him, my back facing him, and I felt his warm hands hit my hips through the thin shirt. Me-OW./ -> This probably just me being Alex but I found this hialrious. ;)
I snuck a peek across the room at the bar counter. All four boys were staring back me, perplexed looks crossing all of their faces--except Pete's, which contained pure anger. -> Poor Pete. Not. :I
This boy was all of charming, and drop dead seductive. -> Oh yeah. You can say that again.
Take the rating point and write more.