Ithilwen has some good points, but overall the middle/end did get to me.. the begining is slow and there isnt much of any real... um...momentum or reason to the fight with sess. but i did like it. alot actually.. i am quite embarassed about now though. i cried a bit in class.. ahhaha
nice job. it takes a lot sometimes to get me to cry. great story.
Author's response
Thank you! I think the most important part about writing is connecting with the reader on an emotional level. I am glad to know that this story did that. I don't know if I will get around to reworking this story, but if I do, I will definately work on the beginning of it. Thanks for the review!