Well ...if cute and pretty was what you were going for, then you got it. That must have been a 9.8 on the Hallmark scale.
There isn't any actual plot in here. I see you've marked it as "humor," but if this is meant as a parody of over-sweet teddy bear stories, then I'm sorry, but you've only managed a reproduction.
Author's response
i'm not. there's no damn general section here so where else was i suppose to put this?
and it is cute...and it's not humor just general. i wish this term was here so i can apply just that.