Hey, I have a few things to say... Happy Early Birtday! You're an exceptional writer for an almost-10 year old. :) I think it's spelt Odie, not Oddie, but I' not entirely sure. Also, I'm also pretty sure Class of the Titans takes place in Canada. Be sure to capitalize the first letter of all names, like Hera, Jay, Pompeii, and Herry. You may want to try adding a little bit more description, like someone's face showed worry/anger/happiness/etc. or what people, creatures or landscape looks like. Finally, make sure to hit the enter button before someone new talks, it helps to clear confusion sometimes. That's just some help in case you want to improve, only if you want to. You've got some great talent already. I can't wait for the next chapter. You've got a great idea here, and excellent writing skills! :D
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Thanx for the advise. I try pretty hard so it is hard to remember things. I really need a bit of helping when it comes to writing on ficwad. And thanck you for the happy birth day and all others. No onder you are such a good writer