I don't want to nit pick or anything but there are a lot of spelling and grammer errors. I don't want to sound like a bitch or anything because I love this story and I love the whole plot line for it. I could proof read for you if you'd like me too before you post it here. Leave me a message on here if you'd like. I would be glad to help if you want me to. I can't wait for the next part. :)
Author's response
I respect your opinion!Thanks! I know I probably do need to edit or whatever! But I'm srry if I'm not a professional writer and dont get ever little writing detail correct. But I'm still an amature to this, so plz bare with me.