Sorry, but this story is a total Train Wreck. You have no grasp on the actual story and nothing really happens, like at all. And don't pick on red heads, they're awesome! I'm not one myself I have past-the-shoulder length brown hair that I straighten and don't pick on people with glasses, it's not a disability! I have glasses for reading and I'm just fine. If you are going to write any more Illiterate stories like that, save yourself. Because if you actually want good reviews, make something happen!
Yours truly,
Mrs-Jay