Review for The Slayer, The Avatar And The Guardian Of Light

The Slayer, The Avatar And The Guardian Of Light

(#) Geovanni_Luciano 2007-01-10

1 small thing that I would fix is the Potter statement you made in regards to Minerva. She only ever calls him Mr. Potter, not Potter. Additionally, you used: For the first time in many years he looked his age. Alot of people use that, and therefore anytime I see that phrase, I cringe. There are alot of firsts. I look forward to your next update, hopefully it will include Fleur and something naughty. SMILES!