Thought I should take a look at your stuff since you reviewed mine G.S.P. story
You know...the quote
"She died slowly and painfully because of you, you and your foolish plans. You are the reason she is dead and now you can't bring her back. My sister is dead!" is pretty catching. If I read that as an opener and then learnt we are speaking mutant/super hero action I would be pretty interested. Writing a good prologue that give the background without becoming dull is hard, very hard. The general plot of your story sounds nice, yet you skip over many events that in them selves are great story material and end in a scene that is not clearly great adventure/story material(at least it is not obvious what kind of scene it is).
My suggestion would be that you should aim for a couple of connected short stories about your characters. Each little story presenting some of the background you give in your prologue. A good start would perhaps be the death of the sister, sounds like an interesting event.
Hope you find this feedback useful.
/TC
Author's response
thanks. that is a realy good idea. i apresheat the feedback! í'll start with the death of the sister and move on from there.