...Okay, you've got my attention. This is great - funny and intense all at once.
There're a couple moments where you have homophones (reigns/reins, and donning/dawning in the first full chapter), but that was the only real problem I noticed, and it's barely a blip.
I'd like to know how your main character figured out the difference between what the church says their god wants and what she's really after. (And is it really magic if he's praying, one wonders? XD)
This is rather going on my favorites list. Brilliantly done.