wow... ummm... you deffinately dont describe much any more... i just noticed that... lol... js... and i'm just gonna voice my opinion here... but i think you're spacing your chapters out a little too much... but thats just my preference on it... x_x...
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sighs im trying jez....and also i don't think i am cause (this is my opinion) when i try to read ones that are in paragraphs i get lost to easy. and yeah i'm trying to get the discriptions in there but i don't want to be TOO discriptive...